July 8, 2009

  • Ghazal

    I love summer break.  Among the pleasures of time off is the fact that I can attend the monthly meetings of our local poetry group.  We meet, greet, critique and eat.  For any of you in a club, you understand the joy in fellowshipping with like-minded people who share your passion.  This month's homework was a weird little Persian form: the Ghazal (pronounced guzzle) This was my attempt.

    Ghazal for Dorothy

    Over the rainbow, behind the wall,
    when nothing is left, the pain is all.

    Dancing like munchkins, we troop to Oz;
    slow-rusting like tin, the pain is all

    swirling as monkeys through poppy dust.
    Renewing the quest, the pain is all

    Dorothy’s reflection and nothing more;
    good wizard erasing the pain and all.

                   6-7-09 Cheri Neuman Herald

Comments (7)

  • I love it!

  • Nice poem, I read it the other day but couldn't post anything (not your site, in general).

    Your comment on my pulse...
    I don't know how you could live in Florida. Whenever I got to Miami in the summer I am struck by the heat and the harshness of the air. Its all I can do to make it from the car to the mall! People think the Caribbean is hot, but its not that hot and the humidity is tempered by the trade winds.

  • you have captured nicely the scary stressedout side of the wizard of oz

  • I have a Best Friend, Whom I sometimes call The Wizard over us all. Yes, The Great I Am, Can erase Pain and All.
    As you know, the Bible speaks against Wizards. You see, there is only One, who is not a fake.
    Your magnificent poetry gave me chills.

  • This poetry sounds like a music . Are there special rules to write it .?
    Enjoy your spare time with the poetry and the meetings of poets .
    You speak of walnut wine . This is a delight . here is a link:http://www.slowtrav.com/france/notes/mellen_walnut_wine.htm
    Love
    Michel

  • Yes, Michel; they're complicated.  Mine isn't exactly right--our examples weren't perfect.  Here's one link: http://smriti.com/urdu/ghazal.def.html 

    Thanks for the walnut wine link.

  • I watched the site with the definition of ghazal . yes it looks rather complicated . but your poem sounds well .

    Love

    Michel

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